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Offline Gil Galad Elven King *Generic

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Come on, tell me how bad my writing is....
« on: September 30, 2009, 05:42:06 PM »
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I want as many opinions as I can get, so go to my blog (link below), and read the part of the story I posted, then post a comment and let me know what you think. If you want to criticize it, make sure it's constructive. 

Go Here to read it!
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Re: Come on, tell me how bad my writing is....
« Reply #1 on: September 30, 2009, 05:49:24 PM »
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Re: Come on, tell me how bad my writing is....
« Reply #2 on: September 30, 2009, 05:55:17 PM »
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hmm... I had the intent of this story being sort of a thriller of sorts, but I can see from your comment Smokey how it can been taken entirely differently all because of the way I wrote it... interesting...
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Re: Come on, tell me how bad my writing is....
« Reply #3 on: September 30, 2009, 06:05:20 PM »
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Seemed more like a love story to me, Thrillers usually don't have endings like that  :P.
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Re: Come on, tell me how bad my writing is....
« Reply #4 on: October 01, 2009, 08:13:33 AM »
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That's not the end of the story though, just a part.  I can definitely see where I need to define more in certain places though.  Thanks!
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Re: Come on, tell me how bad my writing is....
« Reply #5 on: October 01, 2009, 04:59:39 PM »
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I haven't read it, but it can't be as bad as my writing  :)
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