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Treasures in Heaven
« on: March 15, 2017, 01:11:50 PM »
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So I came up with this idea... I don't totally like the name, but its all I could think of that might be able to fit with the card... so... Im open to different names for the card and opinions on it.

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They seem pretty lame as fighters maybe we should challenge them to a dance off or a redemption game

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Re: Treasures in Heaven
« Reply #1 on: March 15, 2017, 02:17:10 PM »
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First, Redemption doesn't have "effects" it has special abilities. Second, if this is supposed to save/protect the cards getting targeted then it needs to have an instead ability, otherwise it only does something if those cards are still in territory after the targeted ability resolves.

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Re: Treasures in Heaven
« Reply #2 on: March 15, 2017, 04:23:54 PM »
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I'll update that tomorrow. What do you think of the concept?
They seem pretty lame as fighters maybe we should challenge them to a dance off or a redemption game

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Re: Treasures in Heaven
« Reply #3 on: March 16, 2017, 01:01:26 PM »
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They seem pretty lame as fighters maybe we should challenge them to a dance off or a redemption game

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Re: Treasures in Heaven
« Reply #4 on: March 16, 2017, 01:48:01 PM »
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I'm still confused as to what "them" is or refers to. The trigger targets singular card, so what "them" are you putting in the LoR instead?

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Re: Treasures in Heaven
« Reply #5 on: March 16, 2017, 03:00:41 PM »
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The cards. I was just trying to find a way to shorten the wording a bit.
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Re: Treasures in Heaven
« Reply #6 on: March 16, 2017, 03:33:39 PM »
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I understand what you meant, I'm just pointing out that there's a plurality issue between the target sentence and the instead sentence. The first only targets one card, the second somehow then insteads multiple cards. Just needs to be cleaned up a bit.

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Re: Treasures in Heaven
« Reply #7 on: March 16, 2017, 04:55:43 PM »
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I'll add an (s) to card in the first sentence
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Re: Treasures in Heaven
« Reply #8 on: March 17, 2017, 03:25:38 PM »
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